First Draft Story Beats

Hey everybody,

So, what can I say... haha, it's late, and this is basically on impulse. This is
a clay blob for me, and for us, to chip away at and sculpt, amirite?

I will say with caution (and I hope this doesn't sound too selfish): I was in
two groups for the last project, and the group that had less of a role with
trying to figure out the story was actually more successful than the group that
actively tried to figure out things for me. What often happens with storyboards
is between me, my story group, the faculty, and my project group, there are WAY
too many cooks in the kitchen. I suppose the only thing I'm trying to say is
have faith in my problem solving, and even though I want your opinions and your
input wholeheartedly, please don't get offended if I happen not to go with the
directions you've given me.

Anyway, here it is (I can guarantee this will change by tomorrow btw):


Story beats:

1. White Lady walks in to the kitchen from her bedroom.
2. White Lady notices that half the kitchen is boxed up (the other half is
isn't).
3. Her husband, aged, walks through the front door with an empty box.
4. Confused, she asks him why he's packing things.
5. Ignoring her, he walks in to the bedroom, and places the box on the bed.
6. She accuses him of leaving her.
7. She notices a picture on a nightstand.
8. The picture is of her blowing a kiss to him. He looks considerably younger
but she looks the same.
9. She notices her husband grabbing his clothes from the closet and she stands
between him and the box on the bed.
10. She's pleading for him not to leave her now, and she tries to reach for him
but her arm goes through him.
11. She quickly realizes that she can't touch him.
12. Her husband turns around and walks through her, and puts his clothes in the
box.
13. She begins to transform, and her being a ghost is revealed (to be
specified).
14. The man notices the picture, and has a moment of nostalgia.
15. He blows a kiss to the picture.
16. He then looks back at the room to see no one there with him.
17. He packs the picture in to a box that has other knickknacks from their
marriage.
18. (Time passes) She watches him from the window. He gets in his car (that
contains some boxes), and he drives away.
19. She blows him a kiss and disappears back in to the house.

The specific mechanics may change, but ultimately it's a story about the wife
embodying the man's past, and his marriage. After years and years he's moving
out of the house, but really, he's trying to move on emotionally.